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Post by sleepyhead on Jan 3, 2005 22:51:06 GMT -5
a freshman. does anything else matter?
*grumble*stupid freshman*grumble*
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Shamarock
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Post by Shamarock on Jan 5, 2005 16:24:39 GMT -5
yes, im freshman... but only for a year. im Brendan Doyle, i usually hang out with Jordan, or Thor, or Brandon, or Patrick. i usually have a coke in my hand, and an awsome element beanie on my head, i have kick ass long brown hair, a red beard, and deep blue eyes,(girls love that part), and my daily schedule revolves around making an ass outta myself publically... and for some reason, i have gotten very popular among the freshys for doing so... but ya... thats who i am.
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Post by Shamarock on Jan 6, 2005 17:02:32 GMT -5
Hello all... we have been invited to have some time in the upcoming gig that forrest and them are trying to put together, we are planning to do some songs from other bands, along with some of our own, including an instrumental or two... so i've been working on some new lyrics that i wrote about my personal love life (painfully denied that it may be)... so ya, tell me what u think. its better to get laughed at here than at a gig...
why, oh why, lord, must you try so hard to destroy me and my heart? why, oh why, lord, must you make it so hard for me to be happy? now you know, lord, how you forced me to create my new anarchy. please dont hate me, lord, for opposing you with my new found army. (instruments only) please dont cry, lord, when we meet face to face in the field of battle. one of us, lord, will die by the hands of cataclysmic war crimes. if it should be i to fall and die, lord, grant my final request. make her life, lord, so much better than mine, so she'll never suffer. (instruments only) in the end, lord, one shall reign supreame over the whole universe. i dont want this, please dont make me do the things that i know i must. its not fair, lord, why cant i win? love and war, they both end in death. was it so hard, lord, for you to accept my peace offerings? (instruments only) please dont cry, lord, when we meet face to face on the feild of battle. one of us, lord, will die by the hands of cataclysmic war times. if it should be i to fall and die, lord, grant my final request. show her love, lord, like i would give her, if only given a chance. (instruments only to a fade out.)
so ya... its ok-ish in my opinion, but i wanna hear your opinions. if ya think it sucks, tell me, if ya like it, tell me, i dont care. but keep in mind, they do sound a lot better once you have the beat to sing them to.
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Post by sleepyhead on Jan 6, 2005 17:16:19 GMT -5
if you make it sound good it might be cool, but looking at this on a lyrical level it's ok. you say "lord" alot... it's fine to make a point, but your audience might get bored hearing the same thing over and over. also, honestly, it sounds like a lot of other songs. the same sorrowful thing. i'm not saying i'm not guilty of that, almost... in fact all of my songs are sad. it's just a more powerful emotion to write with. i think you should try to change up some things. throw out unexpected and totally raw emotional lines that don't sound like cliche's.
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Post by YETI on Jan 6, 2005 23:07:27 GMT -5
it doesnt matter what you say...if you have shitty lyrics just makeit so no one can understand you. it worked for us. im not saying ryans lyrics were shitty...im saying that we never knew if they were cus we had no idea what he was saying.
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Shamarock
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Post by Shamarock on Jan 7, 2005 14:58:42 GMT -5
lol yes, but unfourtiounatly, we are not screamo.
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Post by James on Jan 7, 2005 15:06:59 GMT -5
nor is ryan, if you hadn't noticed...
And actually they were from like Cinderellas Cellar. You must be way behind, bondage is so totally cool. Who doesn't want to cut off their circulation throughout their body?
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Post by YETI on Jan 9, 2005 17:32:31 GMT -5
lol yes, but unfourtiounatly, we are not screamo. and now you must die. if you dont like our music, just say so. you dont have to resort to insults of that level.
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Shamarock
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Post by Shamarock on Jan 10, 2005 13:58:14 GMT -5
no no no... yeti, i not saying that i dont like screamo, i just saying that we dont play screamo... hehe sry for the misunderstanding.
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Post by cifirrekcuT on Jan 10, 2005 19:48:51 GMT -5
as accepted as religion might be among people, at a show, they might be thrown off with the repeated 'lord,' looking around to see if other people like it before they decide themselves. If you're not screaming the words like in the o-so-familiar genre 'screamo,' saying lord so much will sound like a prayer rather than a wish. That might be the desired effect, but i'm just throwing up a caution flag. religious sounding music is harder accepted by a general public. And a side note, there are a lot of hacky songs that start with 'why.' Starting with why is a reach for credibility, or at least it sounds like it.
They're not bad, but pretty cliche, like ande said. But it's further than I've ever gotten with trying to write something. Keep it up and make sure you really feel or advocate what you're writing about. Phoniness is very transparent in song. Passion can make the worst song sound decent.
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Post by YETI on Jan 10, 2005 23:19:12 GMT -5
no no no... yeti, i not saying that i dont like screamo, i just saying that we dont play screamo... hehe sry for the misunderstanding. no, i was saying you insulted us by calling us screamo. screamo is in the official top 5 shittiest genres ever. and we dont even sound like screamo, unless it has changed a whole lot since i was in seventh grade.
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Post by sleepyhead on Jan 11, 2005 0:46:12 GMT -5
genre battle! NOW!
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Shamarock
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Post by Shamarock on Jan 11, 2005 14:27:50 GMT -5
lol well no offense intended. i wasnt really thinking hard to think of a better name for it at the time.... it was about three in the morning.
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Post by YETI on Jan 12, 2005 23:42:44 GMT -5
or how about i just tell you what sucks. any genre with more than a 5 letter name sucks. and many genres that have less than 5 letters suck, but not all of them.
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Post by Missy on Mar 27, 2005 19:57:51 GMT -5
ok, this is for my band, Three Quarters Pidgeon consisting of Brendan Doyle - Bass guitar (oh ya baby!!!) Jake shields - Drums Jordan Nesheim - Lead Guitarist Thor Johnson - Vocalist for any of you that by any chance give a damn about a freshman band, post somefin here, we could use money, a studio (as we are currently practicing on weekends in Jake's garage), gropies, and anything u could possibly help us out wit. thanks. and since im really new here, plz don delete this tread. ::smack!:: I told you that you guys could use my gym to practice like... two months ago. But fine, go practice with that dude in wherever from the Mecca! =p. -Missy Ps. Your Vocalist is a whore... i think i hate him and i have good reasons.
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Post by sleepyhead on Mar 27, 2005 20:00:23 GMT -5
who are you?
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Post by Justin Leedy on Mar 27, 2005 21:13:57 GMT -5
He he..."gropies"...
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I, Doyle?
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Post by I, Doyle? on May 23, 2005 15:59:44 GMT -5
ok, updates for TQP:
Thor isnt our vocalist, and actually never even got together for a practice, so were short a vocalist.
That was one of our groupies, who dosn't know that her family wont allow us her gym. i dont think.
And i'm going to post all my new lyrics on this thing, and some of my bass riffs or personal tabs that i think are accurate. so constructive critizisim is as appreciated as ever. also give me a 1 through 10 rating all of them.
We still need a vocalist, unless i can master all the riffs needed and the vocals to play at the same time, and we desperatly need SOMEWHERE to practice regularly. maybe two to three times a month. lemme know if you got n e thing.
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I, Doyle?
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Post by I, Doyle? on May 23, 2005 16:22:35 GMT -5
ok, first new lyrics.
"I, Reality"
[there is about a minute intro here to warm up to the lyrics, and its pretty kick effen A]
Wake up, time to die Look up, at the sky People, wonder why I can't cry
Fuc king, Ignorance Allways, will be bliss Fifteen, Painful years Of silent tears
Something, yells at me Deep in-side of me Helps me, to be free, From popular reality
[no lyrics for a few cycles then chorus (sp)]
I am, an Individual Feelings, that you'll never know <----- chorus People, they all laugh Cause they-dont-know-me-for-me
You say, that you know that you're, in control when you, cant see past your own shadow
[and from here, i had another verse and then a chorus, but i dont remember the other verse, so ill just let you know that it ended with a pretty nifty bass riff]
whaddaya think? its a LOT better with the music and when u get the tune.
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Post by I, Doyle? on May 23, 2005 16:25:04 GMT -5
ill post more tommorrow, cause its time to go.
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